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Josh-Ulrich
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Post by Josh-Ulrich » Thu Apr 19, 2007 8:06 pm

A short story I came up with for Illustration class.

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Post by thirdeyeh » Thu Apr 19, 2007 9:04 pm

Nice work my friend! I think it really came out well. I think you solved a lot of storytelling challenges well and created a pretty strong sense of the action.

There's only two things that I feel may have benfited from pushing them further. The splash page feels like it could have used a bit more detail. As it is, the idea comes across, but the battlefield feels fairly empty and not entirely too dynamic in that shot. The second thing is on the 7th image/page panel 1 where he is pointing the gun at the tank. I think this shot works and I know its the angle we talked about last time. The angle is fine, its the energy in the shot that could use a boost. I think something simple just like moving the shooter closer to the viewer would solve this problem. Right now It all feels a little stagnant in that shot.

I really like it though man. It's nice to this piece from the thumbnails to the finished art. Hope the class liked it.
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Post by Josh-Ulrich » Fri Apr 20, 2007 5:31 am

Thanks man.

I definately agree with your crits, I was seeing the same things with those panels. The problem was that I basically ran out of time to change them. I may go back in however and adjust a few panels to make this a strong finished piece.

This summer, I'm working on landscapes/scenery/backgrounds and color.

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Post by pH » Fri Apr 20, 2007 10:11 am

Good job josh, color pallete's excellent.

I think "lethal" is spelled wrong though. You'll have to check.
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Post by Josh-Ulrich » Fri Apr 20, 2007 2:12 pm

Thanks Steven :)

Good call on "lethal", never type set after midnight :P

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Post by twconstantine » Fri Apr 20, 2007 3:10 pm

I like it. It has a very good use of the color red.

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